feedback needed

I'm switching up the order I work in. So, rather than build a team first, I'm going to build a team as they are needed. I think this will be more effective for me.

In any case, I'm not here to look for memebers. I am just asking for feedback on my design doc for this game.

www.dampes8n.com/novellachronicles-designdoc.doc

There is a lot I have left out of the design doc for now. FOr 2 major reasons. But feel free to give me any kind of feedback you want.
About any aspect of the game.


Also, Antony, I don't know how you are, so I'm saying this. Just cause 2 games have the same source of inspiration, doesn't make them the same game... I think you'll see what I mean. There is nothing in common between this game and that metroid game you wanted to do for like 3 days. The idea for this grew out of my own love for the metroid games.

Anyway.

If anyone does want to join the team. Give me an e-mail. However. Right now I am only looking for a:

2D artist
Pixel artist
programmer for a proof of concept


Soon, once I know the ideas in the game will work and it is more fleshed out and I have some basic content created for it. I will need:

engine and editor programmer

Which can be the same person or not.
As I need members, I will post new topics.


To get us back on track. I am just looking for feedback on the idea, the layout of the design doc itself, details I may have overlooked, and all that.

Thank you all bunches.

Any game featuring a controllable stripper on the menu screen gets my vote :)

One thing, spend a lot of time getting your tile-map editor right. You're going to have to include quite a number of flags per tile to get everything implemented nicely.

Oh, one more thing (just thought) no voice acting please ;-D

I think a design document should start with things like what is the target audience, what's the fun stuff the player is going to enjoy doing in the game, what's his goals, what keeps him (or her) returning to the game. Technical specs should come only after that kind of things are set.

Arctic fox.... that would be the game propsal... the document you write to get publishers and other such people interested in you game... But thanks for the input... all of that is in there, just broken out of the overview.

Vinyl.... yes.. no VO for this one.... and yes.. the stripper menu is like a total stroke of genius.. and sets the mood SO well.

thanks

This is a real basic prelim mock screeny... The BG is trash... just didn't want a white BG... no HUD or UI or Character... and only the most basic of tiles.

But for now, those tiles are at least the general idea of what will be the final product... with a lot of tweaking, color changes, and re-dos.

Anyway... Thought I would put this up.

I will keep adding to this as tiles are made. So this screen shot will look better and better over time.

As always.. Feedback is wanted.

And I'm ready to get a pixel artist working with me. If you are interested, send me an e-mail.